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CharlesS

Page history last edited by Charles S 5 years, 5 months ago

A solitary tree in a solitary wood.

A Tree unlike the others, not normal as it should.

 

A man’s blood, sweat and tears.

All become part of his fears.

 

He really wants to end it all.

He wonders he could make himself fall.

 

The man stumbles to the tree.

Wondering where he should be.

 

He sees the gnarled branches, forlorn in the wood.

He thought about it more, if he really could.

 

He thought about his children, and how they would react.

He thought about his wife, who might have a heart attack.

 

His skin crawled at the thought.

He dropped the noose and left the tree, not angry, nor distraught.

 

 

Comments (24)

Hannah V said

at 1:02 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I can tell you put a lot of work into this! I like how it rhymes, and makes sense!

Zander B said

at 1:15 pm on Dec 18, 2014

It's very deep, rhyming, and depressing, since he is going to hang himself(spoilers)

Charles S said

at 1:18 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I really like the way it shows the man having depression and how he plans to hang himself, but thinks of his family and how they would feel, leading to him having a realization about how everything is much more than he is.

Ian M. said

at 1:34 pm on Dec 19, 2014

Didn't you write this?

Charles S said

at 1:35 pm on Dec 19, 2014

Yes

Charles S said

at 1:35 pm on Dec 19, 2014

I believe when she said comment on everyone's story she meant myself as well.

Moises C. said

at 1:30 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I like that he knows he is much more to his family and if he hangs himself he knew what would his family think of him.

Weller C said

at 1:31 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I like that it did not come right out and say what he was about to do. deep poems move others, great way to express this.

Charles S said

at 1:40 pm on Dec 18, 2014

*Deep

Taylor N said

at 1:35 pm on Dec 18, 2014

This poem moved me! Great job!

Brinna E. said

at 1:37 pm on Dec 18, 2014

Good job, you expressed the thought really well.

Rebecca F. said

at 1:40 pm on Dec 18, 2014

Great job! it was very good. I like how you made it rhyme.

Chase S said

at 1:40 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I really liked how they rymed and made sense like you wouldn't believe on how cool this is.

Charles S said

at 1:41 pm on Dec 18, 2014

Thanks

Morganne M said

at 1:42 pm on Dec 18, 2014

Good job! I like how you made it rhyme

Chloe Gr said

at 1:45 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I like how you described things and how it rhymed.

Chloe Ga said

at 1:49 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I love powerful it is! Good job!

Ezra S said

at 1:57 pm on Dec 18, 2014

That was actually pretty sad. I can't believe he was going to hang himself.

Gina G said

at 2:01 pm on Dec 18, 2014

Very depressing. Great Job!!

Sam W said

at 7:50 pm on Dec 18, 2014

I like how it rhymes good job

Joey S. said

at 9:12 am on Dec 19, 2014

I like how it rhymes. And it is very deep.

Dylan F said

at 1:31 pm on Dec 19, 2014

love the rhyming it is really cool i was impressed

Ian M. said

at 1:34 pm on Dec 19, 2014

Very interesting and descriptive.

Dylan F said

at 2:01 pm on Dec 19, 2014

Very nice poem

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