A solitary tree in a solitary wood.
A Tree unlike the others, not normal as it should.
A man’s blood, sweat and tears.
All become part of his fears.
He really wants to end it all.
He wonders he could make himself fall.
The man stumbles to the tree.
Wondering where he should be.
He sees the gnarled branches, forlorn in the wood.
He thought about it more, if he really could.
He thought about his children, and how they would react.
He thought about his wife, who might have a heart attack.
His skin crawled at the thought.
He dropped the noose and left the tree, not angry, nor distraught.
Comments (24)
Hannah V said
at 1:02 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I can tell you put a lot of work into this! I like how it rhymes, and makes sense!
Zander B said
at 1:15 pm on Dec 18, 2014
It's very deep, rhyming, and depressing, since he is going to hang himself(spoilers)
Charles S said
at 1:18 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I really like the way it shows the man having depression and how he plans to hang himself, but thinks of his family and how they would feel, leading to him having a realization about how everything is much more than he is.
Ian M. said
at 1:34 pm on Dec 19, 2014
Didn't you write this?
Charles S said
at 1:35 pm on Dec 19, 2014
Yes
Charles S said
at 1:35 pm on Dec 19, 2014
I believe when she said comment on everyone's story she meant myself as well.
Moises C. said
at 1:30 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I like that he knows he is much more to his family and if he hangs himself he knew what would his family think of him.
Weller C said
at 1:31 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I like that it did not come right out and say what he was about to do. deep poems move others, great way to express this.
Charles S said
at 1:40 pm on Dec 18, 2014
*Deep
Taylor N said
at 1:35 pm on Dec 18, 2014
This poem moved me! Great job!
Brinna E. said
at 1:37 pm on Dec 18, 2014
Good job, you expressed the thought really well.
Rebecca F. said
at 1:40 pm on Dec 18, 2014
Great job! it was very good. I like how you made it rhyme.
Chase S said
at 1:40 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I really liked how they rymed and made sense like you wouldn't believe on how cool this is.
Charles S said
at 1:41 pm on Dec 18, 2014
Thanks
Morganne M said
at 1:42 pm on Dec 18, 2014
Good job! I like how you made it rhyme
Chloe Gr said
at 1:45 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I like how you described things and how it rhymed.
Chloe Ga said
at 1:49 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I love powerful it is! Good job!
Ezra S said
at 1:57 pm on Dec 18, 2014
That was actually pretty sad. I can't believe he was going to hang himself.
Gina G said
at 2:01 pm on Dec 18, 2014
Very depressing. Great Job!!
Sam W said
at 7:50 pm on Dec 18, 2014
I like how it rhymes good job
Joey S. said
at 9:12 am on Dec 19, 2014
I like how it rhymes. And it is very deep.
Dylan F said
at 1:31 pm on Dec 19, 2014
love the rhyming it is really cool i was impressed
Ian M. said
at 1:34 pm on Dec 19, 2014
Very interesting and descriptive.
Dylan F said
at 2:01 pm on Dec 19, 2014
Very nice poem
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