Chores
The sound of machinery and engines.
Cars zooming past.
Watching ducks waddle about,
Cows mooing in the pasture,
Chickens clucking in the barn
Cats chasing each other about.
Pouring grain into a stuffy chicken pen.
Smell of farm in the air.
The musty smell of hay
The mud sucking at your feet.
The texture of the grain running through your hands.
The metal handles of the buckets digging in to your hand.
Shoulders ache
Hands hurt
But finally finished.
Comments (16)
Jayde B. said
at 10:53 am on May 8, 2014
It's like I am watching everything happen right before my eyes, you are a very good writer, great job.
Jenna O said
at 10:57 am on May 8, 2014
Great job! I feel like I am actually there!
Tommy R. said
at 10:59 am on May 8, 2014
nice job with the sounds, i could hear them
Carter H said
at 10:59 am on May 8, 2014
Good job, the details made everything seem very realistic
Jordan B said
at 11:02 am on May 8, 2014
When you said cars zooming past I imagined a camaro speeding by and you used good descriptive words like musty
Grace K. said
at 11:02 am on May 8, 2014
I could hear all of the different sounds of the animals
Kayla K. said
at 11:03 am on May 8, 2014
I like you details it helped me get a good visual.
Tatum K said
at 11:03 am on May 8, 2014
I like how you describe what all the animals were doing. I could see a picture in my head.
Anthony F. said
at 11:04 am on May 8, 2014
I like how you said the mud was sucking at your feet.
Allie W said
at 11:07 am on May 8, 2014
I can really relate to your poem. It gave me a clear visual picture. Great job!
Morgan E. said
at 11:09 am on May 8, 2014
I could really see and hear all of the animals around me. good job
Ben F. said
at 11:10 am on May 8, 2014
I like how you said the but finally finished.
Rachel D said
at 11:14 am on May 8, 2014
I like how you separated the last three lines so you could actually feel the pain. Nice Job!
Garrett L said
at 11:14 am on May 8, 2014
I like how you described the metal handels of the buckets. Good Job.
Kassi S. said
at 12:39 pm on May 8, 2014
Great Job, you did a great job describing the last lines! It made me feel like I was out doing my morning chores.
Mrs. K. said
at 3:11 pm on May 12, 2014
I love how you end it with the last 3 lines
"Shoulders ache
Hands hurt
But finally finished."
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