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RachelD

Page history last edited by Rachel D 6 years ago

Crisp morning air biting at my skin,

 

Dryness of my mouth from just waking up,

 

Hearing the birds chirping happily,

 

Opening the creaky wooden door of the barn,

 

As my horse greats me with a friendly whinny,

 

The rich, green, scratchy hay and sweet smelling feed,

 

Cold water spitting up into my face,

 

The happy feeling of being..

 

There.

 

In  the barn.

 

Comments (14)

Croy S. said

at 10:53 am on May 8, 2014

I liked the descriptive words you used.

Garrett L said

at 10:54 am on May 8, 2014

I like how detailed you are on how you feel and what hear when entering the barn.

Jenna O said

at 10:54 am on May 8, 2014

Great job Rachel!! I Felt as if I was actually there!(:

William M said

at 10:55 am on May 8, 2014

I like how heavenly the barn feels.

Carter H said

at 10:56 am on May 8, 2014

I like the detailed descriptions in what is happening, good job

Grace K. said

at 10:58 am on May 8, 2014

I liked the way you described the creaky wooden door

Kayla K. said

at 10:59 am on May 8, 2014

I like how you describe the morning.

Tatum K said

at 10:59 am on May 8, 2014

I like how you said "Crisp morning air biting at my skin." I could imagine going out into the morning.

Mrs. K. said

at 11:01 am on May 8, 2014

I love how you separated out the last 3 lines to emphasize how it felt to be
there.
in the barn.

Anthony F. said

at 11:02 am on May 8, 2014

I liked how you thought the feed smelled sweet.

Ben F. said

at 11:03 am on May 8, 2014

I liked how told us all the sounds you herd.

Jordan B said

at 11:07 am on May 8, 2014

When you said the word crisp at the begining that got my attention right away and made me really want to read it

Allie W said

at 11:07 am on May 8, 2014

I got a clear visual picture. Great job!

Jayde B. said

at 11:09 am on May 8, 2014

Great emphasis on the last little bit, very good. It really drew me in.

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