A Night Before Christmas
A night before Christmas all through the workshop, the elves were building and wrapping toys. The raindeer were getting ready to fly. While some of the elves put bells and there arness on. That only true beleviers could hear.The one and only Santa with a chubby belly and red checks with a white berd was looking over the bad and nice list checking it twice. While eatting a cooky. The elves pack the big red sack with baseballs and dolls with toy trucks and little trains and stocking stuffers.The elves feed the raindeer hay so they were fuled up and ready to go! Then the clook steriked 12. Then santa came down and hoped in his slay and said on Dacner on Prancer on Doner and Vicen. Then off they went. Then the elves went home to bed and waited for Santa to return. Then on Santa's way he stoped at every place down the chimny came Santa all covered in soot filled the sockings and put a present onder the tree.Then came up the chimny again then went to the next house. Then in the 128th house he was in a little girl no older than 3 named Suzzy. She said, “Santa ,is that you?” Santa said to little Suzzy with her sleepy eyes, “ Yes I'm Santa did I wake you up I'm sorry”. Then Santa gave her the teddy bear that she wanted and sent her back to bed. Then when he got all the houses done he said Mery Chirstmas and all a good night! Then with a wip he where gone with a flash. Then at the noth pole he was not done he went to everyone house up there. Then went home to Miss.Claus and his baby boy and put what he wanted by him in his cribe. Then the elves stared to take the stuff off the deer then Santa said, “Go home with you family i'll take care of this”. While Santa took the bells and arnessis off the deer he gave them each there favorite treat. Then went in his house and went on his chair to take a break before tommorrow to start working all over again.Then Miss.Claus said, “Do you want one of my cookies?” He was full but he couldn't pass up one of her cookies. Santa said, “Sure one more cooky for me then”. Then went to bed. Stanta said, “365 day untile next Chirstmas”. Then he fell asleep ready for the work to start again tommorrow.
Comments (21)
Andrew W said
at 11:00 am on Dec 12, 2012
Wow nice story brandi i could really imagine the little girl
Brooke H said
at 11:01 am on Dec 12, 2012
I liked your story. I liked how you used a lot of detail and made it interesting.
Kenzi J said
at 11:04 am on Dec 12, 2012
I really liked how you included the little girl. I can just imagine her talking to Santa Claus.
Jena M said
at 11:07 am on Dec 12, 2012
That was a really good story brandi. I like how you had lots of details.
Braxton S said
at 11:09 am on Dec 12, 2012
I liked how you were spesific about him eating cookies and the elves.
Jaysn R said
at 11:18 am on Dec 12, 2012
I liked how you used quotations on "365 days until next Christmas."
Dawson H said
at 11:21 am on Dec 12, 2012
I was able to see the story in my mind and it was very interesting
Taylor B. said
at 10:39 am on Dec 13, 2012
I liked your story Brandi! It was good and it kept me interested.
Faith R said
at 10:54 am on Dec 13, 2012
I liked your story! It had good detail.
Lexi B said
at 11:07 am on Dec 13, 2012
Good Job Brandi! I like how you went with the Christmas kind of story since Christmas is coming soon!
Mrs. K. said
at 11:14 am on Dec 13, 2012
I like how you made this story full of happy details about Santa, the elves, and the reindeer on their Christmas mission. I like the specific example of Suzy!
Austin T said
at 10:12 am on Dec 14, 2012
Great Job Brandi. I could really image the little girl and I also like that you included lots of detail
Angelia H said
at 10:14 am on Dec 14, 2012
Great story! I loved how you kept it interesting.
Tiffany R said
at 10:18 am on Dec 14, 2012
Great story I liked how you kept it interesting.
Jackson L said
at 10:22 am on Dec 14, 2012
Good story it kept me interested and I like how you had plenty of detail.
Taylor N. said
at 10:22 am on Dec 14, 2012
I really liked how well you described the things in your story. Nice Job Brandi!(:
Noah F. said
at 10:26 am on Dec 14, 2012
I like in the beginning how you wrote it so it fits the songs and books.
Kerrigan U said
at 10:28 am on Dec 14, 2012
I liked how you described everything well and you explained exactly what he did.
Felicity T said
at 10:36 am on Dec 14, 2012
I liked how you described everything good, also I liked how you included what the elves, reindeer, and santa were doing to get ready!
Madisen O said
at 10:42 am on Dec 14, 2012
That was a very well detailed story! I like how you included all of the elves and all of santa's crew.
Jaden S said
at 8:35 pm on Dec 17, 2012
I liked how well you described things in the story! I liked how you told about the elves and santa and things like that good job!
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