My Aunt summer
By: Cheyenne Kennedy
One day I was sitting on my couch and thinking about when I was younger and what I did. Then I thought about what I did with my aunt summer. We had so much fun together. We would go in my grandma’s garden and eat the peas right from the garden. We would make animal noise and play with each other. She would tickle me. We would find grandma’s shoes and we would put them on and put dresses on. We would do each other’s hair and put make up on each other. We would make Cory (my uncle, her brother) smile for a picture but he would not smile. Then we would make super together. Then we would make cookies and eat some of the batter. My favorite batter to eat is chocolate chip.
If I could see her again we would have so much fun. I would have to buy a plan ticket or have mom drive me to Illinois to see her. I would love to spend one week with her. We would play with her stepdaughter, and have lots of fun together. Summer has three dogs and we would play with them. We would go shopping together at the mall. She says that they have a really big mall. We would make cookies together and browns together and let her stepdaughter have some batter. We would put her stepdaughter in a dress and do her hair and put make up on her. We would pick a day to go out to eat and go to the movies. We would go to Applebee’s to eat, and we could see the last movie of Breaking Dawn. We would take her stepdaughter to the zoo and buy her lots of cotton candy. We would have so much fun that I would not want to go home. It would be hard to leave because I would miss her so much. I’m planning on going ether this summer or next summer. I will have to save my money so I can buy stuff with her.
Comments (22)
Emily H said
at 11:42 am on Feb 28, 2012
I love this story. You used capitals and end punctuation. The story is great
Jaylee H said
at 11:45 am on Feb 28, 2012
I liked how you used detail, and it made me feel like i was there with you and your aunt.
Bradley N said
at 11:46 am on Feb 28, 2012
It was a very good story, and if I were you, I would want to go to my aunt's house everyday.
Alexis G said
at 11:46 am on Feb 28, 2012
i thought that you used good details and the right puncuation and capital letters in all of your sentences.
Taylor D said
at 11:51 am on Feb 28, 2012
I loved the story it was like being right there with you and your aunt.
A.J. F said
at 11:52 am on Feb 28, 2012
i loved the story and the way you told us about the characters.
Courtney M said
at 12:03 pm on Feb 28, 2012
I like how you made it seem very real. That is kind of what I did when I was little.
Cassie W said
at 12:03 pm on Feb 28, 2012
The aunt in this story seems really great, I loved the way you made her!
GraceK said
at 12:04 pm on Feb 28, 2012
Your story made me fell like I was there
Chase T said
at 12:06 pm on Feb 28, 2012
i liked how you did so many different things together
Claire H said
at 12:07 pm on Feb 28, 2012
The details were great it was like I was there.
Delaney M said
at 12:07 pm on Feb 28, 2012
I love how you explained every thing in a simply way! I understood every thing, and the GUM was almost perfect!
Morgan E. said
at 12:08 pm on Feb 28, 2012
it had a lot of detail and it made me feel like i was with my aunt when i was younger
Croy S said
at 7:28 pm on Feb 28, 2012
The story told a lot of detail, good job.
Kade C said
at 11:49 am on Feb 29, 2012
I liked the story, and I liked how you used lots of detail.
Allison B said
at 11:50 am on Feb 29, 2012
Your aunt sounds like a really fun person and the activities you do sound fun, too.
Joe B said
at 11:52 am on Feb 29, 2012
i want to do all those activities(exept the makup and that stuff)
William M said
at 11:54 am on Feb 29, 2012
How you described Summer, it was like she was a kid too.
Lukas O said
at 11:57 am on Feb 29, 2012
This is like when I go to my aunts I never want to go because we have fun together
Andrea D said
at 11:58 am on Feb 29, 2012
i liked how you added yourself in to the story
Hannah M said
at 4:32 pm on Feb 29, 2012
I like how you added yourself and when you were little!
Faith J said
at 11:22 am on Mar 1, 2012
I like how you add the step-sister.
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