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Allison B

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Never Going Back

By: Allison B.

 

“Right this way Ms. Vanner,” said the principal, “room 14C your new homeroom.  This was my first day of 6th grade at Princeton Middle School, even though it was in the middle of April.  I had moved to Princeton only two days before, but I was already a little but frightened of the town.  It was very old and many of the buildings were considered “landmarks.”  I think they should be torn down because it looked like they will fall any second.

When I walked in the room, everybody stared at me so I tried to ignore it.  “Class, this is Isla Vanner.  She moved here all the way from Napa, California,” announced the teacher.  “Wow, California to Massachusetts, that must have been some drive.”  I tried to smile, but hearing about my old town made me think about my friends and all the things I had to leave behind.  My parents said I would love living in Massachusetts but so far, it had been miserable, even my parents seemed sad.  We had to move here because my dad, who works for a large company, got transferred.

I planned to sit alone at lunch, but there were no open tables so I sat at a table with a couple of empty seats.  “Hi, I’m Camryn,” said the girl I sat next to. “Are you enjoying Princeton so far?”

“I guess,” I answered, “It’s just, this town is kind of scary-looking.”

“I take it you’ve been downtown.” I nodded.  “I bet you’ve also seen the old house south of the school,” said Camryn.

“What old house?” I asked.  “Have you ever been in it?”

“Wow, you sound just like my friend Vince, very adventurous.”  “I bet you even want to go check out the old house after school,” said Camryn with a smile,” people say it’s haunted.”  I shrugged, but she was right, I did want to check it out, and she was right about me being adventurous.  Even though Princeton was creepy, I kind of liked it and wanted to see the old buildings. 

“Maybe some other time,” I told Camryn.   Her, Vince, and I became very close friends after that.

A month later, when my mom picked me up after school, I asked her if she would drive by the old house.  That house was scarier than any of the other buildings downtown.  I really, really wanted to go inside and thought maybe I would take Camryn up on her offer. 

“I don’t know about this, Isla,” said Camryn with uncertainty.

“I think we should, I’ve wanted to go in there forever but Camryn wouldn’t let me.  She said it would be too dangerous because there could be bats and mice living in it,” said Vince with a frown, “or ghosts.”

“How would we even get in?” I asked.

“It’s always unlocked for some reason, I guess know one really cares if someone gets in.  No one has lived there in years and I want to see if the rumors about a ghost living in it are true,” said Vince.  “An old lady lived there about thirty years ago.”

The Friday night after that, we decided to go inside and check the place out.   We went at about 10:00 p.m., so we had to use flashlights.  When we opened the door, it creaked along with the rest of the house.  It was really windy so the whole house shook.  It was filled with cobwebs and the furniture was ancient.  It was a two-story house so we decided to look around upstairs first.  There was only one bedroom upstairs with just a bed, a bedside table, and a dresser with a large mirror.  The mirror was shattered but in the small piece that was left, I swear I saw something walk by in it.  I also thought, when I sat down on the bed, that I saw another indent beside me.  I started to get a little frightened, but was eager to investigate the rest of the house.

There was only one, large, open room downstairs, except for the bathroom.  We walked through the kitchen first and as Camryn was walking by the open shelves, a plate fell right behind her almost hitting her on the head.  We were all pretty shaken up after that and we decided it was about time to go.  As we were walking out, the big wooden rocking chair started slowly creaking back and forth picking up speed very time it rocked.  That was it; I couldn’t take any more of the eerie house.  All three of us ran for the door and as I was closing it, I saw a short, dark figure slowly walk down the stairs towards us.  When Vince, Camryn, and I could not see the house anymore, we all agreed that there was definitely something or someone still “inhabiting” the house, and that we were never going back in it.

 

 

Comments (20)

Jordan E said

at 11:40 am on Feb 28, 2012

good dialog i could follow along easily

Croy S said

at 11:41 am on Feb 28, 2012

It was a very good story. I liked because it was mysterious and I didn't know what would happen next.

Claire H said

at 11:43 am on Feb 28, 2012

I liked how you had so many details it put a picture in my head of the old house.

Joe B said

at 11:45 am on Feb 28, 2012

That is a great story!I liked the eerie details!I am trying to decide if i want a nice house, but haunted one!

Andrea D said

at 11:45 am on Feb 28, 2012

the part ware she moved to Massachusetts in the middle of the school year and also when she wanted to sit alone is very said.

Jacob E said

at 11:50 am on Feb 28, 2012

That must have been scary for you and mostly when you seen something walking down the stairs when you are shutting the door.

Delaney M said

at 6:16 pm on Feb 28, 2012

Wow Allison! That was awesome! It was a scary creepy story, and i was scared, but I liked how you made it something weird, but you weren't so scared you would have nightmares about it! Awesome Allison!

Ashton J said

at 10:40 am on Feb 29, 2012

Gave me chills! Good job with the dialogue usage!

Faith J said

at 11:12 am on Feb 29, 2012

I loved how you kept making me want to read more. Oooooooo!

Anna T said

at 11:15 am on Feb 29, 2012

I loved it. The Dialogue was awesome good jod!

Bryce s said

at 11:16 am on Feb 29, 2012

it was prety scary

Marrah B said

at 11:16 am on Feb 29, 2012

You had nice dialogue and an interesting story. I like the name Camryn!

Callie L said

at 11:44 am on Feb 29, 2012

It was a very good story that was well written.

Bradley N said

at 11:45 am on Feb 29, 2012

I loved your story and I think that you should write more and read then aloud to our class

GraceK said

at 11:50 am on Feb 29, 2012

Your story was very interesting and it had great details. I could follow along easily and it made me fell like I was there.

Courtney M said

at 11:58 am on Feb 29, 2012

It made it feel like stuff that happens here at school

Emily H said

at 12:02 pm on Feb 29, 2012

i love this story there is great detail and no spelling errors. i also love mysterys and scary storys.

Lukas O said

at 12:04 pm on Feb 29, 2012

Great details you made it sound really

Morgan E. said

at 12:09 pm on Feb 29, 2012

YOu had a lot of good dialog

Hannah M said

at 4:20 pm on Feb 29, 2012

You had good dialog and details! Nice Job Allison!

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