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Derek E

Page history last edited by Derek. E 8 years, 2 months ago

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Hi my name is Derek E and I am the king of the northern kingdom. It is the second biggest kingdom in the world. I have 10 villages, and 3 castles. My kingdom has 3,659 villagers, 1234 knights, 678 archers, and 597 guards. I live in the biggest castle witch is the third biggest in the world. My neighboring kingdom rulers are Bob and Jimmy. Bob has a bigger kingdom then Isaiah bout they are both pretty small. I have a peace treaty with them cause I didn’t want no blood shed. The biggest kingdom ruler is Fred. He is one of the strongest lords there ever was. He is so powerful because he had created a dragon. He rides his dragon into battle every time. He only lost one battle and that was to me. We had been fighting for 5days then finally he called a retreat when he couldn’t take us all. That was 17 years ago though. He still to this day wants revenge. He has been taking out all these little town-heading torts me. I know this cause I sent a spy to go see it. I am afraid that he is going to try to take me out again, but this time I’m going to have help from my allies. I have been forming an army ever sense I herd about fred's. I have had some luck, I have now got Jimmy, Bob, Gorge, and Phil on my side. We have formed an army of about 10,000 men. Phil's town would be the first to be attacked, but the only problem is that it is in a plain. So there would be no way we could protect it. So I told him to bring his villagers to my Kingdom and we will make him one when we get this battle over with. The next place would be Gorge's. I had sent most of my builder’s there to quickly build more defense towers and a wall. I had sent a spy to Phil's kingdom so he could tell me when they were to reach it. My builders had finished the wall in about two months. We were surprised to see that Fred wasn’t here yet, but just then my spy came and told me that they were on their way. I had sent about 500 archers ahead to surprise attack them. Only 64 came back. They told me that he had an army of about 12,000. So I had set up manipulates on a ledge just next to the kingdom. I thought id use them to try and take out there manipulates. There wasn’t enough room in the kingdom for my entire army so I sent all the villagers to mine, and the rest of the army to a woods just on the edge of town so they could attack from be hind. I had went with the group that would be attacking from behind and left Bob in charge of the rest of the army. My job was trick cause I had to hide my men from fred’s army. I had 4,000 of the men and we all had horses. So I decided to hide in the forbidden cave. This was a huge cave, but it had a myth that there was a demon in there. I had lead us in to the cave when I got to the back almost I herd a sound. It was a loud ROAR!!! I looked and there it was, the biggest dragon I had ever seen. I told my men to stand still and not make a sound. I came up to the dragon and gave it the rest of my food. I started talking to it and it seemed like It could under stand me. I told that I needed its help to defeat Fred’s army, and his dragon. Then all of the sudden the dragon spoke and said that he would help to defeat this other dragon. I had took my saddle and put it on him. I had took him to the front and then I waited. Then back at the kingdom Bob had seen Fred’s army. It wasn’t what we expected there were 15,000 men. It had groin sense my spy seen it. Bob was a smart king and knew that they would just use there manipulates till they were died. So without my permission had moved the men out of the city. He put all of the rest of the archers by the manipulates. He had them hide so they wouldn’t be seen and Bob took all of the guard’s to the other side of the kingdom. Then he waited for them to start firing. Then when they got close enough he had the manipulates start firing then the archers. He also had sent all of the guards into battle. Then he blew the horn witch had summand my group of men. I had said charge and of we were. I was riding the dragon while the rest of them were on horseback. I had stayed pretty low and behind my men. Then we came around the turn and there it was, Fred’s army. The first thing I noticed was that Dustin and his dragon weren’t there. The dragon I was riding wasn’t happy. He was about to leave when there he came. Fred was on his dragon coming strait at me. I quickly turned us around and we all started fighting. My dragon kept bighting and bighting. Finally I had killed Fred’s dragon. After that everyone stopped fighting, for Fred had been defeated. I was the new king. They all dropped there weapons and bowed to me there rightful ruler. I was now the ruler of all of Fred’s kingdom and mine. The first thing I did as ruler was built my kingdom that I lived in bigger. I had made my castle bigger, wall, room, watchtowers, and everything else. It was now the biggest there was. I had also rebuilt all of the towns that were distorted. From that day on I no one tried to attack me for I was the greatest of them all. If any of them tried to come close to building a big army I would destroy them. On my last year word got about that there was a new person that had come into our lands by ship. It was said they had a great army. So I said that I would send my oldest son to meet these new comers and see if they mean war or peace. A week later one of the guards had returned and told me that they had killed my son and the rest of the guards. When I herd this I was fierce. So I started to make an army again, for the last time. It took me awhile to gather up all of the troops but when I was finished I had about 20,000. The guard that came back told me they had only about 10,000, but more were coming by ship. I had been to weak to take the troops into battle so I called on my old friend Bob to with my other son by his side. So they took of tored these men and when they arrived they had surrounded them. There other ships had not arrived yet, but Bob could see them in the distance. He quickly thought of a plan and just then he thought of a great one. He had the hire grounds so why not send a few men down and bring up there entire army. So in order to make this work he had put all his archers on the ledge around them and hidden. Then he sent some of the men who had volunteered. Down to bring up this other persons army. They had reached the bottom when all of the sudden BANG!!! It was a cannon. The had already made guns and cannons. So Bob rethought the attack and all of the sudden the other army was coming at them. So Bob had the archers fire. The archers took out many of there men. So Bob sent all of the knights into battle. At the end Bob had won just on time to. He found on of there wounded and asked how to use one of the cannons. He told and Bob used it to shoot the other ships. Then he asked who his ruler was and he replied it is Hennry. Then we found out how to make guns and cannons and lived haply ever after. THE END

 

Comments (26)

Mrs. K. said

at 2:11 pm on Mar 15, 2012

YOU NEED TO USE DIFFERENT NAMES! PLEASE FIX RIGHT AWAY!

Autumn L. said

at 7:41 am on Mar 19, 2012

I like how it takes us back into the medieval times, of knights and kings and castles. Also kinda like King Arthur.

Madeline T. said

at 7:42 am on Mar 19, 2012

I like how you added a lot of details about your kingdom.

kelvin g said

at 7:42 am on Mar 19, 2012

really creative and good i like how you use good detail to explane how many men there were and stuff.

Jacob L. said

at 7:43 am on Mar 19, 2012

I liked how you put in there that they used team work to help defeat they enemies.

Bailey M. said

at 7:43 am on Mar 19, 2012

You used a lot of good detail in your story.

Natalie F. said

at 7:45 am on Mar 19, 2012

Great detail in your story.

Kimberly R. said

at 7:45 am on Mar 19, 2012

I like how you explained the people, and I also liked how you used words like BANG.

Mikayla A. said

at 7:47 am on Mar 19, 2012

You used good detail about your kingdom.

Kiley J. said

at 7:49 am on Mar 19, 2012

I can see that you like the medieval times. Good details too.

dustin said

at 7:51 am on Mar 19, 2012

very good detail Derek great story.

Rebecca M. said

at 7:56 am on Mar 19, 2012

I liked how realistic you made it sound. Very nice word choice to!

Johnny W. said

at 7:56 am on Mar 19, 2012

It was good how you described how the battle plans went on and how at the end they have cannons and guns.

Gabrielle J. said

at 8:11 am on Mar 19, 2012

I liked the way that you described your kingdom. There was a good before and after picture.

Hannah R. said

at 9:17 am on Mar 19, 2012

I like your imagination, and how you make this interesting.

Natalie M. said

at 7:45 am on Mar 20, 2012

I like how you described your kingdom, and how interesting it was.

Isaiah.R said

at 7:51 am on Mar 20, 2012

There was a good description of your kingdom.

16acallahan said

at 8:51 am on Mar 20, 2012

I liked all the details about your kingdom.

Leanne L. said

at 8:51 am on Mar 20, 2012

I like how you used specific numbers. Like when you said there was 597 guards and 678 archers. It gave me an idea of just how many people there were.

Tess L said

at 8:54 am on Mar 20, 2012

I thought the idea that you lived in a huge castle was a good idea!

Josh W said

at 8:55 am on Mar 20, 2012

Great part when the dragons are fighting when you used good detail and describing words!

Brian H. said

at 8:56 am on Mar 20, 2012

I liked how there were more archers then guards, because if I was in charge that is what I would have done too.

Ean P said

at 8:58 am on Mar 20, 2012

I like how you wrote about dragons and medieval times, and you also used great details.

Madelin M. said

at 9:00 am on Mar 20, 2012

I liked how you told so much about your kingdom and the surroundings.

jaymy18 said

at 9:09 am on Mar 20, 2012

I like how you gave specific numbers of how many things, people, etc. were in your kingdom.

McKinley G. said

at 9:13 am on Mar 20, 2012

I like you you made the story go back in time and had the specific numbers, also you used great detail on the surroundings.

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