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CodyT

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Summer Baseball

Cody Torkelson

 

Wins and losses, not so good

We had memorable moments though

Game against Postville

Coach Seabrooke was gone

Coach Torkelson filled in

Listened to radio on the way there,

Blue Collar comedy radio

I was pitching,

Pitching pretty well

The best in a while

Their Coach was mad

Cause they were not hitting

Came down to the wire

Riley was batting

Tyler on 2nd

Riley got a hit

Tyler came around to score

Thought he was going to be safe but

It was a closer play than I thought

He was safe

We won the game

My favorite game of the year

Playing baseball with no worries,

That is always a good time

 

Comments (36)

Geordan H said

at 2:07 pm on Sep 19, 2011

You described the game very well

Nick B. said

at 2:12 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Well said i attended that game way to describe it like it was.

Chandler L. said

at 2:13 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Games against Postville are always exciting.

Logan D said

at 2:20 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Great description.

Cayley H. said

at 2:22 pm on Sep 19, 2011

I like how you go into detail about how you pitched.

James said

at 2:22 pm on Sep 19, 2011

VERY NICE! Great discription

Kynzee O said

at 2:23 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Good job describing

cody o said

at 8:28 am on Sep 20, 2011

I like the description.

Dawn T. said

at 8:52 am on Sep 20, 2011

I could clearly picture what was happening, great poem.

Jodi S said

at 10:41 am on Sep 20, 2011

Nice details!

Carly L. said

at 1:01 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how you made it suspenseful.

Austen B said

at 1:01 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Oh eh indeed it was the greatest game of the year. Blue collar was awesome. Dont forget Mcdonalds and how we were almost late for the second game! Couldn't have described it any better.

JacquelineF said

at 1:05 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Nice use of details.

dalton said

at 1:07 pm on Sep 20, 2011

good description on baseball

Bethany P. said

at 1:10 pm on Sep 20, 2011

All the descriptions were amazing.

Ashlee E said

at 1:11 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Nice use of words

Koree said

at 1:22 pm on Sep 20, 2011

good job telling where everyone was and how you felt about your pitching.

Shauna K said

at 1:24 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like the intensity you put into the last section of your poem.

Spencer A said

at 1:25 pm on Sep 20, 2011

i felt like i was watching the game myself...nice description!(:

Maria C said

at 1:26 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you were certain that Riley was safe, but then second-guessed it. It made it suspenseful.

Will I said

at 1:29 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how you described what radio station you were listening to on the way there.

Toni R. said

at 1:30 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Sounded intense and i can relate to those kind of games. Good job!

Mallory B. said

at 1:50 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how you made the game sound intense and then described how the end turned out.

Carly M said

at 1:52 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Good job describing how the game went.

Lexi M. said

at 1:54 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked the intensity and details of the poem.

Sam K said

at 1:54 pm on Sep 20, 2011

You made it sound like a lot fun which isn't easy to do.

Sam C said

at 1:55 pm on Sep 20, 2011

nice description of the game

Chris T said

at 1:58 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked your description of the last at bat

cody o said

at 1:58 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how you talk about winning.

Emily B. said

at 2:03 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Cody, I liked the section in the middle where you where explaining what was happening in the game and put spaces after every thought. It made it a lot easier to follow.

Jenna H. said

at 2:10 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I can tell how much you love baseball from reading this.

Alison M said

at 2:13 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Im sure playing with no worries is a relief. Nice job describing a whole game into just few words.

Mrs. K. said

at 2:15 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how you capture the different images of the game, not just the play by play, but even the bus ride leading up to it. It helps to give the reader a better feeling of the total moment.

Sydney B said

at 2:21 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you described the things that happened leading up to your baseball game.

Kathryn A said

at 4:10 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked the last two lines of your poem because they tie together the loose ends. I really like how you described that even though your win loss record didn't show it you were still having fun.

Mike B said

at 10:43 am on Sep 21, 2011

Liked that you told the whole story and not just bits and pieces.

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