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ChrisT

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Composition poem

Chris Torkelson

 

Trip to Washington D.C.

 

Had the bad bus because of seniors

No air or power

For 19 hours

Got to the hotel

Went to bed that night

Did not wake up on time

When we almost missed the bus

But things got better.

We had some fun touring

And sight seeing

Stayed on time

Had a great week

But then it was over

And 19 hours back to Elgin

 

Comments (37)

Meghan O said

at 1:59 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Describes the situation well.

Cayley H. said

at 2:05 pm on Sep 19, 2011

I like how it feels like a roller coaster just going down and down and down, until it goes up when you describe that it was actually kind of fun.

Nick B. said

at 2:10 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Remember that experience!
Great description

Logan D said

at 2:16 pm on Sep 19, 2011

That was a great time! Good description.

James said

at 2:21 pm on Sep 19, 2011

good discription

kenzie E said

at 2:22 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Very nice, sweet description, and to the point.

Kynzee O said

at 2:22 pm on Sep 19, 2011

Good desription

cody o said

at 8:29 am on Sep 20, 2011

Good job on keeping it short.

Dawn T. said

at 8:48 am on Sep 20, 2011

I can relate, nice description of everything that happened.

Jodi S said

at 10:36 am on Sep 20, 2011

That would have to stink to have no air, nice details.

JacquelineF said

at 12:49 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Great use of details.

Carly L. said

at 1:00 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how you didn't drag out unneeded parts.

Ashlee E said

at 1:04 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Nice organized poem. Good job Chrissy

dalton said

at 1:07 pm on Sep 20, 2011

makes me wish i was out for chorus

Bethany P. said

at 1:08 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Describes the situation really well.

Koree said

at 1:21 pm on Sep 20, 2011

good job telling how short the trip was. It was very short.

Spencer A said

at 1:22 pm on Sep 20, 2011

great description!

Shauna K said

at 1:23 pm on Sep 20, 2011

You described the situation we were in very well.

Maria C said

at 1:24 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you mentioned that it was a nineteen hour drive back to Iowa.

Will I said

at 1:25 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I like how well you described the sequence of events.

Toni R. said

at 1:29 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Describing the events was good. Nicely done.

Lexi M. said

at 1:45 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you talked about the good parts and bad parts of the trip.

Mallory B. said

at 1:49 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Described how hot and bad the bus we were on was. Nice description.

Sam C said

at 1:49 pm on Sep 20, 2011

sounds like the trip almost wasnt worth the busride

Carly M said

at 1:50 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you went from a bad situation to a good situation.

Emily B. said

at 1:53 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Chris, you did a good job writing about your experience. It made me clearly remember that awesome trip!

Sam K said

at 1:53 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you described the difficult parts and then the fun parts.

Chandler L. said

at 1:53 pm on Sep 20, 2011

That was a great trip. Your poem brings back the memory of how hot it was without air ont he long ride

Geordan H said

at 1:54 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I remember when you were late for the bus.

Kynzee O said

at 1:54 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I remember that trip very well. Good job Chris.

cody t said

at 1:56 pm on Sep 20, 2011

Good poem, I remember that fun bus ride.

Jenna H. said

at 2:03 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I can clearly picture how bad the bus ride must've been with no air and being an underclassman.

Alison M said

at 2:06 pm on Sep 20, 2011

"No air or power" totally agree that was a bad part of the trip. All together great poem.

Sydney B said

at 2:13 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I liked how you described the good parts and the bad parts. I was able to relate very well.

Kathryn A said

at 4:07 pm on Sep 20, 2011

I now remember you being late for the bus! I liked how you described our problems on the trip, but you enjoyed it anyway.

Mike B said

at 10:41 am on Sep 21, 2011

There is a very good distinctive turning point.

Courtland E said

at 11:55 am on Sep 23, 2011

You only used the main points very well

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