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SpencerS

Page history last edited by Mrs. K. 9 years, 10 months ago

Wings

By Spencer S

 

Thursday after football

Joe, Odie, Riley, Colton, and I

Were coming back from team supper.

We were packed in Joe’s New Yorker

Were going about 80 miles an hour

With all the doors open

When an extremely sharp corner jumps out at us

We start to drift

It went to slow motion as I look down

Seeing gravel flying and our tire inches from the ditch

I see the long drop off the road into trees

I see things lost in the car fly through the air

As we round the corner

Things go back to normal. 

 

 

Comments (25)

feliciag said

at 12:53 pm on Oct 4, 2010

sounds like fun driving 80 mphs spencer

coltens said

at 1:00 pm on Oct 4, 2010

awsum memory

levif said

at 1:01 pm on Oct 4, 2010

Has a good transition to the slow motion

morgant said

at 1:01 pm on Oct 4, 2010

flows well together. nice job.

brandens said

at 1:02 pm on Oct 4, 2010

sounds like having fuN!?
idk!?

lincolnm said

at 1:09 pm on Oct 4, 2010

sounds fun. very descriptive

samil said

at 1:10 pm on Oct 4, 2010

Sounds like you guys had a great time!

kevind said

at 1:13 pm on Oct 4, 2010

sounds like a good time

claya said

at 1:41 pm on Oct 4, 2010

I can see you doing that.

jamest said

at 1:44 pm on Oct 4, 2010

Nice job going from dull to exciting to dull.

aleesag said

at 1:45 pm on Oct 4, 2010

sounds like fun!

carrieb said

at 1:46 pm on Oct 4, 2010

sounds like a blast! good job.

matti said

at 1:47 pm on Oct 4, 2010

I liked how you described the tires as being inches from the ditch.

lizf said

at 1:53 pm on Oct 4, 2010

i can see you guys doing that good description.

whitneys said

at 1:57 pm on Oct 4, 2010

Sounds fun, Good descriptive words

amberk said

at 1:59 pm on Oct 4, 2010

I like how you described the gravel flying and your tires inches from the ditch. You guys should be a little more careful!

leahg said

at 2:00 pm on Oct 4, 2010

good job pulling the reader into the story.

joek said

at 2:12 pm on Oct 4, 2010

o boy that is probably one of the closest descriptions a person could get to describing that good job

cassiew said

at 2:12 pm on Oct 4, 2010

I can see why this would feel like flying, sounds like an eventful night, good job describing it.

rileys said

at 2:13 pm on Oct 4, 2010

great description, good times, good times.

shannonj said

at 2:19 pm on Oct 4, 2010

Great description!

maxm said

at 2:22 pm on Oct 4, 2010

Sounds like a fun time nice description

Mrs. K. said

at 7:26 am on Oct 5, 2010

I completely agree with Amber about your specific description when the "slow motion" starts, and that you need to be more CAREFUL!

kandisg said

at 6:39 pm on Oct 5, 2010

I can see all of you smashed into joe's car! good choice of words

wyattg said

at 11:08 am on Oct 6, 2010

Some reason i could see this group of people speeding

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