Very descriptive good job

I like the way you describe cooking the marshmallows.

I love the line "Burning Marshmallow, meet my forehead"
I can actually see this happening between you & your family.

This makes me hungry! I loved the line "as we speared our soft, white, sugary victims."

I like how you made the marshmellows as "sugary victims"

I liked how you described that the marshmallows while they were getting burnt. And how it burst ed into flames.

I like how you described the reaction of your brother when his marshmallow was on fire because it created a good visual picture in my mind of his swinging the stick around and then the marshmallow getting on you.

The way you describe the marshmallow in the beginning and how it changed through out the poem was very descriptive. Good Job!

I liked the metaphor of the cooking marshmallows being sugary victims.

Good moment to write about simple enough and sounds like you remember it perfectly.

Ouch, hot gooey sugar bubbled on my face, that gives a very good picture in my mind.

I liked how you gave the marshmallow skin, it made it more visual for me when it started to burn.

I like the way you make it sound like the marshmallows are their own beings

I like how you turned the marshmallows into people.

Great job, very descriptive.

It's great the way you explain the marshmallows.

I laughed on the inside because I can see you and Colton doing this. Made me kinda hungry too! :)

marshmallows are friends. Not victims. Nice memory and exquisite choice of sincere adjectives.

awesome description of the marshmallow. nice job.

Very descriptive

good use of metaphors

Great descriptions i could actually picture it.

very descriptive. i can picture this happening.

good descriptive words! i felt like i was there with you!

The description in the middle and the end is great! I could totally see that marshmallow flying through the air to smack you in the forehead!