Dance the Night Away
By: Amber K.
The dance floor is vibrating
from the bass in the speakers.
Teens jumping up and down
to the beat of the music.
My friends and I,
breakin’ it down
in our scrunched circle.
On comes a slow song
so we each grab a boy.
He is sweaty and gross,
which creates a
two-foot barrier
between us.
Soon the song ends and
back to the circle we go.
The bass fills the speakers
once again.
As the hours pass,
our circle begins to shrink.
Soon the night ends
and sends us our
separate ways.
Comments (22)
claya said
at 1:49 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I like the way everyone leaves.
rileys said
at 1:51 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I like the words you use to describe the boys, which is SO not true. Just sayin'
lexif said
at 1:53 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I can picture the dance perfectly, and the sweaty boys part is very true.
kandisg said
at 1:54 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I can see you dancing with the boy, and barely touching him!
isabellas said
at 1:54 pm on Oct 1, 2010
The poem makes me feel like I'm right there at the dance. I believe the sweaty boy part is extremely true.
wyattg said
at 1:55 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I can picture the bass vibrating the whole floor.
whitneys said
at 1:57 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I like how you made it feel like your in the moment by just reading this.
joek said
at 1:57 pm on Oct 1, 2010
the bass maybe vibrating the floor but the guys couldn't of been sweaty because we never danced but great description
matti said
at 1:57 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I liked your use of descriptive words in describing the dance.
leahg said
at 1:58 pm on Oct 1, 2010
You did a really good job describing this. Almost like we're back at the dances in our little circles again.
carrieb said
at 2:00 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I like the two-foot barrier part. Jr. High dances! haha. I can relate to this because i was there!
jamest said
at 2:01 pm on Oct 1, 2010
Nice way of describing how the dance slowly ends.
jacobt said
at 2:02 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I like the play on words, the slow dance... slowly comes to an end.
cassiew said
at 2:03 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I liked how you described the boys as gross and sweaty, it felt like you were talking about a Jr. High dance.
lizf said
at 2:03 pm on Oct 1, 2010
the way you describe the dance ending is exactly how it goes, really good description.
shannonj said
at 2:05 pm on Oct 1, 2010
Good job describing this. I can just see the gross sweaty boys!
maxm said
at 2:08 pm on Oct 1, 2010
I'm sure the boy was probably the one who decided on the two foot barrier. Good Job
garrettb said
at 1:00 pm on Oct 4, 2010
way to step up and dance with the guy. 2 foot barrier is a lil close isnt it haha
feliciag said
at 1:19 pm on Oct 4, 2010
Good job amber! very descriptive
samil said
at 1:27 pm on Oct 4, 2010
awesome descriptions. it really describes slow dancing with guys.
aleesag said
at 2:14 pm on Oct 4, 2010
nice descriptive words! i felt like i was there!
Mrs. K. said
at 2:30 pm on Oct 4, 2010
You nailed the JH dances with this one... girls all dancing in a circle, 2 ft. barriers in the slow dances... great visuals.
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