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Kalleigh F

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  Writers Workshop

By: Kalleigh F.

     

     There was this girl named Annalise. She was great at sports and got straight A’s in school. Annalise was a senior, who had a passion for volleyball. She had many friends and all of the teachers liked her.

    It all started on the night of one of her biggest volleyball matches. Annalise was in the locker room getting ready for the game. She was doing her hair when all of a sudden she was tackled to the ground. Annalise was then blindfolded and thrown in the back of a big van. She didn’t know who had attacked her. The attacker didn’t say one word to her. The person started driving and drove for about 10 minutes. Then the van stopped and shut off. Annalise was scared and confused. Then the driver got out of the car and left. She was just sitting there. Annalise then took her blindfold off and looked around. It was pitch black outside, and she couldn’t tell where she was. She tried getting out of the car but it was locked up. The van had a certain smell and it wasn’t pleasant.

    Meanwhile back at the school, the game was about to start. All of the fans were in the bleachers getting ready for the game. The head volleyball coach met with all of the girls in the locker room, but there was no Annalise. They looked and looked for her, but she was nowhere to be found. The team went to Annalise’s parents and asked where she was. But they said that she was supposed to be there. It was one of the biggest games of the season, and Annalise was missing it. They had to start the game because all of the fans had already paid to get in. The team ended up losing the match because one of their best players wasn’t there.

    Annalise broke down and cried because she was scared and wanted her family. After approximately two hours the man eventually came back, but he didn’t reveal his face. He eventually drove out to this barn. He then revealed his face, and Annalise immediately knew who it was. It was her best friend Kaitie’s dad, Dave. Dave told Annalise that his daughter never got to play because of her, and that she would never get a college scholarship. He then whipped out his gun and shot her. It was all a blur. Annalise felt the bullet go slowly and painfully into her chest, then she was hit again. And that’s when she collapsed and died.

Everyone was wondering where Annalise was. The whole community searched

for her. Then the search and rescue team came. Annalise’s parents were scared and sad all at the same time. The person that was the most upset was Annalise’s little sister Emily. Emily has Autism and Annalise was her only friend. Annalise made Emily happy.

    Once Dave knew that Annalise was dead he covered her with hay and left her in the barn. He then headed back to the school where there were a bunch of cops and a rescue squad. Dave went up to Annalise’s parents, John and Karen. He told them that he looked for her, but he couldn’t find her anywhere. Kaitie ran out of the school crying because she didn’t know where her friend was. She ran up to her dad and continued to cry.

    After weeks and weeks of searching for Annalise’s body was found by a search and rescue dog. He found her buried under piles of hay in the old barn. The death examiners examined her body in their lab and decided that she was shot twice in the chest. Investigators worked for months and months to try and figure out who killed her, but they could never find out who did it.

    Kaitie’s family never knew that their father was the one who killed Annalise. He knew that if he told Kaitie that he did it, she could never forgive him. Everyday Dave had to live with that burden. He had to look at Annalise’s family in church, at volleyball games, at the grocery store, and still remember that he was responsible for killing their daughter. How could anyone do that?

 

 

 

Writers Workshop

By: Kalleigh  F.

 

     It was when I was in second grade and Leah invited me to stay over night at her house. After school we went to Leah's house. Then we got all of our snow gear on and went sledding. Leah had this hill beside her house that led down to a corn field. It wasn't very steep, but you really picked up speed if you had a good sled. Leah and I always rode in the banana sled. It went really fast. But we only managed to make it completely down the hill about four times. This was because we either flipped, went off track, ran into someone, or hit a tree. It was very painful.

     After hours of sledding we decided to go inside. I think we watched some movies and played board games, but I really can't remember. Then we went up to Leah's room That's when we decided that we would have a fashion show. So we found the weirdest outfits possible and dressed up in them. We even dressed up Leah's stuffed animals. She had one big frog and a big white teddy bear that we dressed up. Then we walked down stairs to show her mom. She laughed at us. After trying on so many weird outfits we decided to stop. Leah's room was trashed with clothes, so we had to clean them all up. Then it was time for bed. Back then we didn't stay up very late. As you can see we were quite strange as little kids.

 

Comments (16)

Tessa said

at 10:02 am on Mar 5, 2010

I LOVED your 1st story kalleigh! :)

Kennedy said

at 8:46 am on Mar 8, 2010

I really liked your first story, it was a good, but sad ending. And I have to agree...you and Leah were rather strange, and I'm pretty sure not much has changed!

Leah said

at 8:46 am on Mar 8, 2010

your first story is awesome!! and we were such strange children (:

Ryanp said

at 8:51 am on Mar 8, 2010

I like your first story.

Brady said

at 8:53 am on Mar 8, 2010

very good first story, but the ending was sad and your second story is really funny

Mrs. K. said

at 8:56 am on Mar 8, 2010

Story 2 sounds exactly like something my daughter would do! :)

Belle said

at 8:56 am on Mar 8, 2010

I love the story about Annalise! It was really suspenseful. That's not the only dress up story I can remember....haha

Shelby said

at 9:05 am on Mar 8, 2010

I loved the first story, it was really sad, but then it jumped right into the funny one so it wasn't that sad anymore. I always seem to think in stories that the good people can't die, because you don't want them to. But I still loved it!! Everyone had dress up parties back then.

Kjerstin said

at 9:07 am on Mar 8, 2010

I feel sorry for Annalise, even though she wasn't real. You and your friends aren't strange. OK, maybe you are, but you're all hysterical.

Kathleen said

at 9:10 am on Mar 8, 2010

I love how you can make up a story about a girls best friend's dad killing her. That is very creative...

Colby said

at 10:07 am on Mar 8, 2010

Your 1st story was excellent! I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. Your 2nd story was really funny, you guys make me laugh! :)

Collin said

at 10:16 am on Mar 8, 2010

Your first story is something that i didn't expect from you but it was great. I'm starting to worry about happens at leah's.

Doug said

at 10:16 am on Mar 8, 2010

i really like the story

Trevor said

at 12:32 pm on Mar 9, 2010

"nice!?" story

NickW said

at 10:52 am on Mar 10, 2010

Your first story was good but sad and your second one was.........odd but it was still good

Courtney said

at 9:47 am on Mar 11, 2010

second story sounded fun when you went on the banana sled!! :)

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